Describes the contemporary problem, but with gaps in detail with respect to the applied setting
You did well here, but consider including more references earlier in your paper to introduce the contemporary problem. This will help reinforce how integrated the problem is into the literature.
Potential improvements were not evident in your draft. At present, the reader mostly has to infer this. Add a sentence that starts, “Potential improvements are…” and finish that sentence to make it more obvious in your draft.
Recommends appropriate strategies and techniques for improving human cognitive processes, but with gaps in applicability to proposal